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Fabulous Fiction Fridays (1/11/19)

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Welcome back to the next post in the Fabulous Fiction Fridays series!

Last week we saw how so much can be achieved in so few words through the art of Microprose, and we’ll be going down that road again for today’s post.

I believe that it’s so important that we support and share each other’s work, so without further ado…


This week’s post features Still Loved, Still Missed and their piece of Microprose ‘The First Window‘.
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The raw-boned woman gasped for air, smelled death.
The dust in the stuffy cell resembled the white fog waiting to knock the wind out of her lungs.

The first window let fresh air in.
Life made a mass entry.


This piece is so on-point in its descriptions, making the contrast between life and death so very clear. The stale surroundings of the cell connote death, the woman even smells it. She’s raw-boned, almost like a skeleton, all skin and bone.

The dust is another nice addition to show the passage of time and the dirt present. It takes on a violent form ‘waiting to knock the wind out of her lungs’. The sense of struggling to breath and claustrophobia is perfectly present and written so very well.

We, the readers, are able to gather all of this information purely from the descriptions. This is a real talent.

The revelation of the window brings relief not only to the main character but also to the reader. The tense atmosphere of the first two sentences is no more and a rush for fresh air takes place. A nice, deep breath of fresh air. It’s like holding your breath underwater and then resurfacing to get some oxygen.

This in itself is life. Light and air is life. Banishing the darkness and stale air of the cell, life begins with The First Window.

Great job, SLSM!

You can find the original post here, and SLSM’s blog as a whole right here. Please do check it out! ❤


And, if you would like to see more of my work, feel free to check out my latest piece of flash fiction: Mirror, Mirror.

I hope to see you again next week for another day of Fabulous Fiction.

R.J. x

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Blog, Fabulous Fiction Fridays

Fabulous Fiction Fridays (1/4/19)

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As writers I think it’s so important that we celebrate each other’s work and support one another. For this reason, every Friday I will be sharing a piece of fiction to my blog that I particularly enjoyed from the past week. Welcome to Fabulous Fiction Fridays! 

This week I tried my hand at Microprose (you can read my effort here) and I was so surprised at some of the other pieces that I came across. It’s amazing how much detail can be put into so few words.


This week’s post features Belinda Bekkers and her piece of Microprose ‘An Introduction’

‘A firm handshake and a velvety, “Hi, I’m Tom.” Twinkling eyes, the same colour as her cubicle wall. A smile quickening her heartbeat. A realisation that trying to avoid falling in love with him was going to be futile.’


It’s a real skill to be able to convey a story like this in so few words. I feel like I know so much about ‘Tom’ already and how the female character [she/her] feels about him. Manly, smooth, familiar. She clearly finds this combination irresistible after going through her internal checklist.

Just a flash of that smile is enough for a sudden rush of adrenaline. It’s interesting how she falls for Tom after such a short amount of time, seeing beyond that initial lust and deciding that it’s futile to even try not to love him. What a hopeless romantic! To give so much depth to a character’s personality traits through actions alone and so little description is really impressive.

I think the act of scanning a stranger when we first meet them to gauge how attractive they are is something that we all do, intentionally or not, and this piece captures that perfectly in an instant. 

The concept here isn’t revolutionary, it’s something that we’ve all experienced but this time it has been taken to a whole new level. A masterclass in taking a simple idea with so few words to work with and making it into something truly beautiful to read! 

Great job, Belinda. 

You can find the original post here, and please do check out Belinda’s blog in its entirety here. Show her some love! ❤ 


Q: Would you like to see more of these posts, supporting fellow writers? 

If you would like to see more of my work, feel free to check out my latest piece of flash fiction: Vanity in Peach.

And remember, this coming Wednesday will mark the start of my ‘Weekly Wisdom’ series, where I will once again encourage good vibes only. Featuring inspirational quotes and ideas to keep your brain in check, join me on a journey of self-love and mindfulness!

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